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Review:chillychick95 says:
Hola, issa Lexy !!
This is a very sentimental one-shot. It's sweet, long enough to get everything across but short enough to not drown us in first-person woe-fulness -claps- Commendable there.

First thing's first, your summary is good :] but I felt the fact that you don't have a banner just detracts from your story. People like flashy, sparkly graphics when they click on a story and most of the time it's the bright sparkly stuff they click on.
It might get your review/read rate up =]

I'm a little stumped as to your title. 'I'm not that girl' I would've thought the story is about Harry comparing Cho to Ginny... I think you should call it Wishes but I haven't heard the song "I'm not that Girl" - goes to check it out-
Ow. I totally see where you're coming from now! Right. Disregard what I said about the title totally - Although I would put the lyrics up at the beginning for all those uneducated people like me who haven't seen/heard Wicked.

I abhor Cho. I'm sorry, but I'm not a fan of her clingyness and yata yata but anyway, I'll be diplomatic and continue. I thought you characterized well. She's human with wants but accepts the situation. I liked how you wrote about Ginny the entire time without using her name. (form experience I know that when vindictive you rarely grace the person with their first name)

I didn't see any spelling errors or punctuation etc but I wasn't really looking. I was too busy reading. Nothing really stood out that much so ... good job!

I liked the short phrasing, it reflected how she was thinking at thoughts aren't usually very long but short thought processes and I thought you got that across very well.

I felt like it was missing spark. Obviously it's an angsty piece but there was just so much teenage vindictiveness but no outlet if you know what I mean. It sounded like internal raging... but then she goes onto talk about 'What if's?' and it dissapates. The whole feeling of changing places is there, but then Cho is resigned to the fact that she isn't the type for Harry. although she could be? You know what I mean, you create such a fantastic emotion of jealousy, of naivety and then it's lost... It was so good, but I lost the tension in parts.

8/10 - Definetely something I'd read.
I hope that helped and you didn't get offended or anything. I'm not here to gush over your story but to tell you honestly what I think (constructive criticism) so don't take it to heart but understand writing can never get worse it can only get better and you're already so far ahead!
Lexy

Author's Response: Haha, thanks!

Yeah, I'm going to be getting a banner sometime soon. Hopefully. I know what you mean.

I totally understand what you mean, I'll check that out and see what I can do. I appreciate the comment, I'll reread it and see if I can add something in there...

I'm really glad you liked it. (: And thanks for leaving concrit, it really helps me! :D So far ahead? :D Thank you.

Thanks for such a lovely review. (: I appreciate it.
-Jasmine


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