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Review:witch_in_training says:
Melanie, I'm sooo sorry! I know I said I'd review this around a week ago, and I'm just getting to it now. >_< I feel awful!

It's apparent upon reading it that it is a very good thing you did this as a stream of consciousness fic. That challenge looked VERY interesting, and this is proof that it can turn out well! I was a little scared -- heck, if I were to join the challenge, my writing would be incoherent at best! -- but my fear was irrational. This was brilliant!

I'm not sure what I thought the chapter title (it began with me and ended with you) meant, but it certainly wasn't anywhere close to a good assumption. That's what I like most about this fic; those poetic words are everything the story is about, but unless you see them in context, they mean nothing. It makes the reader want to see them in context and see just what was meant by that story and chapter title.

I think any other form of writing would have lost the entire point of this story (which I think is similar to something I said in my review for As Yet Untouched?). George's thoughts are exactly as they ought to be.

I'm glad you got the word 'moonbeam.' I can't imagine being able to take that simple word and turn it into such a sad story of loss. The way you used the challenge made it seem like moonbeams were meant to appear in this story, not like the story had to base itself off of moonbeams. I hope that made sense!

Lovely piece!

10/10

Author's Response: Gosh, sorry it's taken me so long to respond! Thank you for the fantastic review!

I know, SOC is very daunting -- I used to hate reading it. So I am really glad this surpassed your expectations! ^_^

You're right, I think SOC fits George (and the twins in general) very well. There's an inherent feeling of inanity and nonsense, and I think that makes for a good twin story.

And I definitely get what you meant when you said it looked like moonbeams were meant to appear in the story -- and I'm very happy to hear it!

Thanks again for this review!

Melanie


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