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Review:Georgia Weasley says:
I don't even know where to begin on this one. The characterizations were so spot on. Your James, instead of being the pompous git, showed such depth and humanity. We see the side of him that we remember from the books, but you develop it so much further. You take several one-sided characters and give them flesh and bone. I could feel the claustrophobia of being kept in that little house, no matter how much safety it provided. You gave such a sense of what a young father feels, and then heaped the terror of being targeted in a war upon it until my hair stood on end imagining the desperation he felt. I have two favorite parts of this piece.
1. The interaction between James and Frank at the meeting with Dumbledore. When their eyes met, the way you described their emotions was just breath taking. They didn't want it to be their friend's child, but they really didn't want it to be their own. Tragic. Poignant. Lovely.
2. Your portrayal of Peter. His defeat, and the grief it caused him, was written so well. You gave such insight to the relationship he had with the Marauders, and the sharp contrast with Sirius and James's brotherhood was striking. I almost felt bad for him as he left Harry that day.

This was simply wonderful. What a talent you have.
~GW

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing this! (Thank you for all of your wonderful reviews, actually!)

I'm really glad you liked the characterization. One of my main goals with this was to humanize James, and show the better parts of his character while still hanging onto the humorous aspect that everyone usually loves/hates about him.

I appreciate you pointing out those two scenes, and I'm really glad you thought they added something meaningful to this piece. They definitely held a lot of meaning for me. Particularly Peter -- I'm not a fan of Peter at all, but I'm sure he would have felt remorse and conflict, even at the time he was engaged in his traitorous behavior. It's just very sad to me, how the Potters never knew what was going on when they literally placed their lives in his hands. But I also wanted to explore the way the other Marauders interacted with him, and I'm optimistic enough to think (or hope) that James might have eventually realized he didn't treat Peter very well in their years at Hogwarts. I think the experience of the war would have forced James to grow up very quickly.

Thank you again for the review!!

Melanie


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