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Review:datbenik513 says:
Been meaning to read this for a good while now.

While the deaths of both Ron and Ginny are kind of unexpected, I understand that plotwise it was a good choice. I can even imagine Ron having joined the Dork Lord. He'd always had some hidden, and sometimes not-so-hidden- jealousy at Harry, which could just as well have pushed him into this direction. Ginny's death, however, was an unfortunate event.

I'd recommend to check your dialogue syntax
"It's not over you know." He said, his voice rough and choked.

should be

"It's not over you know," he said, his voice rough and choked.

Quite an interesting beginning.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. Glad that you are enjoying it so far.
Ron does have a great dark side that is very easy to exploit for my purposes. Muhahaha.
Killing Ginny was different though, but saved a lot of explanations and arguments later down the track.
Thanks for the note on the writing. I like to go back over my stories every now and again and review things that I may have altered in a later chapter or need to be fixed but I don't always catch everything so it helps a lot to have readers give constructive reviews rather than just "Nice chapter" and then they move on.


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