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Review:long_live_luna_bellatrix says:
Hey there, sorry it took so long to review this.

This was a cute, fluffly little story. It had a few funny bits, such as when Dominique ran into Teddy and started mouthing off about dark wizards blasting people around corners.

I felt that at times the story moved a little... slow. It just took a little too long for everything to happen, and the effect of the suspense was lost as my mind began to wander. Perhaps the first bit, where it's emphasized how much Dom likes Ted, and the Quidditch incident could be shortened, and it would be better.

I liked the character of James. He was a nice, loving, cough evil cough cousin that I enjoyed reading.

Honestly, I didn't get the whole "Every Dominique has it's thorn" It's a play on "Every rose has it's thorn", right? It didn't exactly make sense with whole story. It sounded like you thought of a title then forced the story on it.

The overall idea of the story was lovely, and it was cute how Dom couldn't say yes when Ted finally asked her out, because of her arm and her stubbornness. It was enjoyable.

~lllb

Author's Response: I understand what you mean when you said it moved slow. The Quidditch incident, yes, I understand it could be shortened.

This is actually my first Next Gen fic so I didn't know how to portray James. I decided to make him a mix of the two people he was named after, James and Sirius. Haha, it turned out well, I guess.

The title was supposed to be part of the story in the challenge so I had to fit it in. I understand what you meant about that...

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it a bit so thanks for reviewing; I really appreciate it! :)

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