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Review:fatality says:
Hello, this is fatality from the forums!

I feel so bad because all I could find to critique are grammar mistakes. Then again when I get into a good story, I blank out and keep reading.

“Miss. Saleena, it is an honor to have you back here with us…” - You don not need a period after Miss. It isn’t an abbreviation but a title preceding a name.

“…I ask, but I hadn’t meant it to sound that could.” - Um, did you mean cold? xD

“Once we are at there, the front door is opened for me…” - Simple enough. ‘At’ should be taken away from the sentence (;

Anyways. Now that I am done being a grammar freak, I am happy to tell you that I really enjoyed reading this story. Saleena comes off as a hardheaded but determined girl who preaches what she believes to be right. But as overused as those personalities are, you definitely made it work. I love how you managed to keep all of the basic information in a tiny one shot without it seeming crammed. Very good! Then again, it might be your writing style. Its just so easy to follow and made me want to read more! Good job (:

Author's Response: OMGosh, yes I did mean Cold! Thank You for pointing those out, I will go back and edit them now!! :)

I am so happy you enjoyed it, and glad that you liked Saleena's character!! She most certainly is all of those things you said she was, lol! And, if you are interested in finding out more about her, she is one if the OC's in my novel "All is NOT Fair in Love & War". It is a Draco/OC fic, if you are interested in giving it a read sometime!! -_~

Thank you so much for the kind and helpful review fatality, I really appreciate it a lot!! :D

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