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Review:collette michelle says:
This was intriguing. I rather enjoyed it! I loved the whole mystery to it. In a sense it lets the reader imagine both people to be who they choose. It could virtually be anyone since names weren't mentioned. And that's what I love about it! In such a short bit, you get to know the character speaking, though you don't have the foggiest whom it is.

I liked the emotions were good too. Being inside the character speaking as they worked out how they felt and what they remembered was catching.

I do feel the cut off made it slightly choppy, but it didn't take much away from the story. Quite honestly, I don't know how else you could have done it for it to still make proper sense...

If, I may ask, who did you first picture the characters to be?

Lovely job, I simply enjoyed this!
xx.
Collette

Author's Response:
Collette, your reviews are just amazing. Thank you so much! I think that's how it was meant to be - I wanted the readers to think of who it suited them to be.

Emotions. I'm glad you liked them. I'm sort of expirementing with them, recently - trying to convey emotions to the reader as well as I can. Hopefully, I'm succeeding :P

Ah, when I was writing, I wanted it to sort of be cut off, but when I was submitting it, I felt it far too choppy. I had to sort of think about what would be easier to understand, I think XD

In my mind, two ships seemed to pop out. Draco/Pansy, Lily/Scorpius. Odd, I know XD Draco/Pansy just seemed to fit for me. I think it sort of fits with canon, too XD Maybe you could PM me who you believed the ship to be (on TGS), I'd love to read what you think ^_^

Thanks, hon, for another great review ^_^ I'm glad you enjoyed it!

-Malia


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