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Review:TheDirigiblePlum says:
What a little gem!! Your story I mean. :)

This was wonderfully gorgeous, so sweet and both of them were completely in character. It was a beautiful moment, and so simple, which is how I imagine Harry would want it to be.

Your writing style flowed and was consistent, with great use of description and imagery that really set the scene. :) One thing I would suggest is to maybe link some of your sentences together, or make them longer. Some of them at the beginning are a little short, which makes them sound abrupt.

eg. It was twilight. Harry Potter and Ginny Weasley were sitting together in a clearing. The air was damp, the weather was cold, and the two of them sat close together for warmth.

If you linked the first two sentences together it would flow a lot more, and really fit with the relaxed, beautiful atmosphere that I sensed you wanted to achieve (correct me if I'm wrong! :D)

Apart from that tiny thing, I have no other criticisms, because I loved this story! It really put a smile on my face. :)

Instant favourite!!


Author's Response: Thanks so much! This is the nicest comment I've had on this story so far, and thanks for the advice on the sentence-joining.

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