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Review:witch_in_training says:
Hey, Wildheart here at your request!

Such a brilliant way of looking at the Potters. It's so easy to think of them as older than their 21 years, but this fic pulls it around to the reality; they're still young, still vulnerable, hardly any more than children.

I like the order you wrote it in, starting with three sections of James and Lily dealing with the news, then showing Harry's birth, and then James's and Lily's deaths. It hit me more deeply than going in chronological order, and I'm very glad you wrote it the way you did. :]

I felt a lump in my throat at this line: Harry Potter was going to be someone special. James has no idea what that really means... It was a great addition to the story.

Not much to criticize, really. I don't like to think that James and Sirius thought so little of Peter, but the brief mention of him through James's eyes was convincing enough on your part that I didn't mind it.

Because of its blunt truth and the way they must have been feeling, this is one of my favorite lines:

It wasnít that Frank wanted it to be Harry, or that I wanted it to be Neville.

It was just that Frank didnít want it to be Neville. And I didnít want it to be Harry.


Your writing is (as always) exceptional, and I feel glad to have read this. I've read a few other fics about this period in the Potters' lives, but never have I encountered on with such perfect emotion and believability. This was definitely a portrayal of James that I can appreciate.

Overall, an incredible story, and it shall forever hold a spot on my Favorites list.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!

What you pointed out -- that it's easy to think of them as older -- is EXACTLY why I wrote this! You hit the nail on the head, and I'm so glad you said that, because it makes me feel like I actually accomplished something by writing this. I don't think people really think about how young the Potters were, and the fact that they were dealing with things way beyond their years. To me, their age makes their story even more tragic (although it is definitely a tragic one to begin with, regardless).

This is the first time I've written something out of chronological order, and I'm really glad it worked out well. I really loved juxtaposing Harry's birth with his parents' deaths.

And THANK YOU for pointing out that line ("Harry Potter was going to be someone special"). I was hoping people would spot the irony there. I really believe that's what James would have thought of his kid, although, as you pointed out, he had no idea what that really meant.

I totally get your comment re: James, Sirius, and Peter. I know a lot of people don't like to see Peter portrayed as the inept one, but I basically interpret what I can based on canon (mainly, the things that Sirius and Remus tell Harry about what the Marauders were like). Anyway, I've always thought of the Marauders' treatment of Peter as pretty unfair, and I wanted James to acknowledge that, and own up to his behavior as I saw it. But I appreciate your honesty in telling me how you see it!

Thanks also for pointing out those lines -- they are a couple of my favorites, as well.

Thank you so much for the amazing review! I'm seriously flattered, and happy to know I was able to achieve the emotional impact I was going for!

Melanie


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