Words cannot adequately describe how I feel right now. This is just...it's just...wow. Um. I wish I could form a coherent sentence, but I can't. I'm at a loss for words, really. But if I had to describe this piece in one word, it would be: beautiful.
This is absolutely, without a doubt, one of the most amazing one-shots I have ever read. It feels like I've just got through the ringer - like I've just read an entire story, yet you somehow managed to condense it into a little under 5000 words. If that isn't skill then I honestly don't know what is.
Let's see. What was my favourite part? Hm, I think that might have been JAMES! Dear Lord, Melanie, you write him exactly how I imagined him! Even I can't write James Potter that well and I claim to be his biggest fan! Honestly, it was perfect. Simply divine. He was confident, but not arrogant. He was funny, but not obnoxious. His love for Lily was sweet, but not sickeningly so. And his devotion towards his family was realistic and incredibly heartfelt. I believed every word that he said. Or narrated, rather. You wrote it so convincingly, I might as well have been reading a memoir or watching a movie or something like that.
It's just...wow. And I love the way you structured the piece. I like how it doesn't happen in chronological order. There is something so - well, poetic about it, I guess. I've read a few other one-shots written in a similar fashion, but they all pale in comparison to this. Perhaps I'm just being biased because A) it's you and B) it's James, but I don't think I am. Besides, would I lie to you?
To put it simply, this was positively divine. Stunning. Superb. Gorgeous. Take your pick of the lot because they all fit it to a tee. Fantastic job, Melanie!
P.S. I love James more than you. :P
Author's Response: Molly! *glomp* Thank you so much for this awesome review! It means a lot to me, coming from someone who loves James as much as you do.
James is quite fun to write (even in a sad fic like this, I managed to sneak in some humor and cheekiness). And I wanted to give him a little more gravity than he's often given in fanfiction, because really this was a trying time for him. I really do admire and respect his character a lot, and I hope that showed through my writing.
This is the first time I've ever written anything out of chronological order, so I'm glad it worked out well!
No, I do not believe you would lie to me, but I believe you babble nonsense, because you flatter me way too much! ^_^
Thank you again! Your review made me so happy!
PS: I concede. Besides, I have Ron. XD