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Review:_DearMyLove_ says:
Oh no, not the tea! What an awful way to go...

I really liked this story, it was so interesting and readable. Your writing has a kind of simplicity that makes it a pleasure to read. Charlie was a brilliant narrator...I loved how matter-of-fact he was. It was quite nice that he didn't have an angst attack when he realised he had been poisoned as I think that would have been quite out of character for him.

The first two paragraphs were the weakest points of the story, in my opinion. The repetition that it was an ordinary day but he would be dead in twenty four hours time felt a little forced. It was like you were telling the reader how ordinary the day was instead of showing them.

I really liked how Charlie methodically went through all the possibilities when he realised he had been poisoned. It seemed very in-character for him to want to run over the past day and try to identify the poison. Plus it reinforced how terrible it was when he finally found out that it was the tea...the other options (being pricked by a needle, the dragon burn etc) all seemed much more...heroic? That's not the right word but I hope you know what I mean...:D

Overall I thought this was a really great oneshot. Thank you for writing it 9/10 :D

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked this story and the way that I write. I've always felt that Charlie was a simple, down-to-Earth kind of guy. Thanks for the critique about the first two paragraphs, I guess I was really trying to emphasise the point about it being an ordinary day.

I'm glad you thought Charlie was in-character. We see so little of him in the books, but that is how I imagine him to be. I think working with dragons he would expect to die in a much more adventurous and heroic way (I do know what you mean) rather than something so little and mundane.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :)


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