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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
More twists and turns here, but it's moving the plot forward very well, revealing more about the characters, both protagonists and antagonists (calling them good or bad, heroes or villains, wouldn't suit, seeing that Black and Grace are hardly the heroic type, nor are they entirely "good"). It's great how you place so many of your characters in a "grey" area - it's hard to tell just whose side their on and what they're going to do next. It makes for a more thrilling type of story, one where the reader can't guess at what's going to happen next; it'll always be a surprise.

I really like how you're able to combine plot development with a large amount of detail. Your descriptions are amazing, producing a very clear visual of each scene. I could picture what their rooms were like, so filthy and lived-in, haha, but it suits both of their personalities - their driven by action and end up neglecting things like housework. What particularly stood out to me, detail-wise, what how much fruit imagery you used here, and not only because it's in the title. I can't describe my thoughts exactly, but I liked how, in the first scene, Grace expresses her thoughts and emotions with the fruit.

Another excellent chapter, and I'll keep a lookout for the next one! This is a fantastic and original story to read. ^_^

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