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Review:Alopex says:
My goodness. What an intense ending. I figured there would be a death at the end, simply due to the nature of the challenge's prompt, but I couldn't have predicted the exact nature of the death. I thought the moody, broody feeling of this story was very strong and well-written.

There were a couple of things I found a bit off. I thought the relationship between John Crane and Charlotte could have done with a bit more development, although I realize things were different in the time period this story was set. It would have been nice to see them exchange a glance or two on their journey, though. Also, I thought it weird that Charlotte left without her child; there was no mention whatsoever of who (her family, obviously) would care for him while she was away. However, I still found that this story drew my attention, and I thought you conveyed emotion well.

Author's Response: I think I must've been in a dreadful mood when I wrote this, haha, so that's probably where my strength came from ;)

I agree with you very much with the development of their relationship. I think for this story, I was focusing a bit too much on the impending doom. As for the child, that is something that I meant to happen. She blamed the child for a lot of her situation, and her motherly instinct was not very well developed. I'm glad that you appreciated this story for what it was, though (a big mess of crazy)! I really appreciated the review :)


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