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Review:Alopex says:
Ah, gotta love George/Angelina. I know a lot of people think their ship is weird, and I guess I can see where they're coming from, but I like it myself. I don't read much of it, but I like happening across it.

This was such a short story that I don't feel there's much to comment on, but I'm pretty good at rambling. From the top: I liked the way you started the story. It was a good way to show the problems that George has been having since Fred's death, it established a pattern and routine with Angelina, letting the reader know that they keep in touch (you don't reveal the extent of their relationship until later).

Even though the reader knows "this time" is probably going to be different - what point in the story otherwise? - you still managed to make me expect a drunken George, and I felt as surprised and pleased as Angelina when he was all put-together. Isn't it just like George to pretend he wasn't, though? It really showed the contrast, and that he was fully aware of it. (That made sense in my head.)

I also liked the way you gradually revealed the extent of George and Angelina's relationship. At first, they could have almost been friends or . . . well, something awkward but not quite romantic, I suppose. You simply gradually revealed how comfortable they are with one another. I felt like you were describing the situation as it was, without trying to explain it to the reader. That's another thing that made more sense in my head.

Let's just say I found a lot to comment on after all, because this was such a lovely and up-lifting and sweet story, and I was impressed by the writing.

Author's Response: You know, when I first heard George/Angelina was canon, I thought, "WTH?" But, then I thought about it and I realized that nowhere does it canonically say that Fred and Angelina were a couple, he just took her to the Yule Ball; that doesn't mean they were going out or even serious with each other.

I definitely believe that George would have had some serious problems after Fred's death and I could see Angelina being there for him, but still being exasperated by him, all at the same time. It's a very adult relationship, with peaks and valleys.

George knew he hadn't acted well the last few Christmases and he wanted to change. It's hard to beat depression and substance abuse, but he was working at it.

Thank you for noticing the gradual way the relationship unveiled. It was deliberate. I didn't want to overdescribe and have it go too M rated, but it had to be shown that they have been intimate.

I'm glad you found this uplifting and the writing to be decent. It's another more recent story and I'm learning how to write gooder (joke!)


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