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Review:Billion says:
What a captivating first chapter! I've got to hand it to you Gubby, you had me from the get go. I love the style of this piece, a fairy tale but a twisted one. Honoria's story reminds me of Rochester's mad wife's in Jane Eyre. Is she dead now or still institutionalized?

Daphne's "You have angered the daughter of a madwoman" is quite disturbing. The letter overall was great because we learn a lot about her in just a few sentences. The 'horrors' that you speak of, I can't wait to find out what they are.

I like the characterization of Maurice too. I'm thinking if his story could be summed up in one word it would be 'desperation'. The actions he takes seem to stem from a need to control that he just doesn't seem to have. Hence why they have negative effects.

"but in the long winter she spend under the wailing sky"
I think it should be 'spent'?

Great job, I'll definitely continue reading. :)

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! It is indeed a twisted fairy tale (my favorite type, naturally). Oooh, I never thought of Honoria as a Bertha type character, but the parallel works wonderfully. Plus Eloise as the young ingenue... very interesting. Too bad we don't get much detail about their children. Honoria is institutionalized in Prague, very much alive.

Daphne is meant to be disturbing, and the letter was to communicate that. I'm glad that it worked! It was a difficult part to get right, whereas much of the chapter had worked quite well up to that point :P

Maurice is an interesting character, and I wish I could go more into his psyche. You seem to have got a lot out of this one chapter, though, and it always makes me glad to see people looking deeper into stories! He is quite desperate, and blinded by it to do foolish things.

Eek! Quite right. I shall fix that up now.

Thank you so much for the review, and I hope you do enjoy the rest! :)

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