|Review:||Romina Stephanie says:|
I had to re-read this, because, while it's amazingly written, I was - and am to a certain extent - totally confused by this (I'm kind of hoping that it's the tiredness and still not my IQ -.-).
I absolutely love the imagery of this; as I'm sure you've already heard, this is art. The descriptions are beautiful, they're alive and they're engulfing. It felt as if I was living it - everything was incredibly real. The story of Persephone is my favourite in Greek mythology. What caught my attention was the pomegranate gelato part and I knew I'd love this. I was happy to see that you had incorporated Demeter, Persephone and Hades and even more happy with the fact that they represented Andromeda, Narcissa and Lucius respectively. You did a great job with these allusions and it was... yeah, it was just amazing, because it was spot-on.
I can't emphasis my adoration for your opening line, and closing line, enough. And you would smile, because you are Hades, and you are the reason she fell. - this is... pure perfection. It's so heartbreakingly beautiful, and sums up the relationships I imagine those three had. And how they'd end up ultimately: a resentful Andromeda, a triumphant Lucius, a naive Narcissa.
I'm rambling again. But seriously - this is hauntingly enchanting. It's art and it's amazing.
Author's Response: I knew it would be confusing; indeed, I sort of wanted it to be, so it's definitely not your IQ (and as you're a genius, it shouldn't matter anyway). Quick summary, Andromeda laments Narcissa's fall at Lucius' hands.
If "art" is "throwing random allusions and vague ideas onto Word document at eleven thirty pm and having no concrete plot and/or point," then yes, this might be considered art. But as writing is an art form, I really am pleased that you think it as such. I do think that the writing here was vivid because I was so caught up in it, having written it in one sitting and half an hour. Persephone is my new favorite in Greek mythology - her story is so chilling, and so intense that it's really a lot of fun to play around with. Pomegranate gelato was really random, actually, but it's got crisp, cool flavors and chills you, and is pomegranate, so it all works out in the end. Sort of. :P
Now, you know I'm a very modest person, but I did really like the opening and closing lines. The fic was going to be a little bit longer (not that I knew what I was doing), but when I wrote that last sentence I knew I couldn't possibly drag it out any longer. It does sum up the relationship between Narcissa and Lucius, and as it is bitter and resentful, we see Andromeda in diction. I really am happy that you appreciated it ^_^
Rambling, Steph, is always a wonderful thing. People don't ramble like they used to. But seriously - this is such a spectacular review. Coming from you, it's all the more awesome. Thank you ever so much for this! -squishes-