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Review:Fuzzy_Slippers says:
Hey, Fuzzy here. : )

Well, first of all let me tell you how much I adore your choice of fanfiction - Regulus gets too little love! I'm currently writing a story very similar to the one you've got here, though mine is a novel. : ) So it's obvious that I love the topic.

I think you've captured Regulus very well. You couldn't tell that it was a girl writing; the male POV seemed effortless. You really captured the younger brother feel to the Sirius/Regulus relationship, as well. Very realistic. All of the flashbacks where Sirius and Regulus were interacting were done splendidly - Sirius seemed just like I would imagine him to be. Great job. : )

The scenes in the cave were appropriately dark and you could almost feel the atmosphere of desperation surrounding Regulus as he tried to escape. This sentence struck me as sort of beautifully sad: 'I could feel my heart beat slowing; fainter with every beat. My body was failing me.' Likewise with the sentence 'One day they would know; he would know and I would have a brother once more.' So fitting for the theme of your story. : )

I noticed a few mistakes. One was a typo: 'I watched, orrified, as my brother balanced our mum's priceless vase on two fingers.' Missed the 'H'. : ) The second was more of a canon discrepancy. You note that Sirius saw the Dark Mark on Regulus, yet Sirius can't have seen any Dark Mark, because in GOF, when Harry tells Sirius about Snape gripping his left arm (or Karkaroff showing Snape something on his arm, I can't remember), Sirius would have known instantly what Harry was talking about and made a comment about it, but he didn't. Anyway, just a few things I noticed.

Great job, really. It was a pleasure to read. : )
Feel free to throw any other fics my way!

Author's Response: Well, thank you! :) I'd love to read your story. It's sounds like it would be very interesting.

It's good to know that it's realistic and such. I always worry about that. :)

Hmm, the canon discrepancy. To be honest, I didn't even think about that! lol Thanks for pointing that out, but I don't think I'll change it. Mostly because I'm not sure how I would. :)

Thanks again!!


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