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Review:Alopex says:
I basically never start reading WIPs that haven't been updated in over a year; I generally impose a 6 month limit on my choices if I'm feeling generous and a 1 month limit if I'm not. But, really, how could I resist a ship like Dudley/Lavender? I have been eyeing this story and its intriguing banner for some time, and I just had to read it whether or not it's ever finished.

I think there's a lot of potential material with the Dursleys, but I hardly ever see stories involving them, and when I do, I don't like them. I've always wondered whether or not Harry was ever in contact with them or not after DH. I'm sure they didn't become friends, but I have often wondered what, if any, contact there might have been. Since the Order was protecting the Dursleys, it seems logical to assume that Harry at least received news that his relatives survived the war.

Lavender is another interesting ambiguity, because the last we read of her (as far as I'm aware) is that she's "feebly stirring" or something like that after having been attacked by Fenrir Greyback. Really, her survival could probably go either way. Pairing Dudley with Lavender is a pretty bold move and definitely requires a lot of backstory and set-up to make it believable. However, the idea appeals to me. :-)a

I don't know exactly when you wrote this chapter, of course, but obviously it was some time ago. The writing here is not bad or anything, but I can tell that you have improved. Your most recent stories are better-written than the older ones, which I'm sure isn't surprising to hear.

Author's Response: Sigh, this story. I posted a new chapter for it and actually deleted it after a few reviews because I was having POV problems. I've actually thought about scrapping the whole darn thing and starting over first person from Dudley and Lavender's POVs. I'm not having trouble with where the plot's going, but HOW to tell it. I think I painted myself into a corner by demanding that so much of it be told in flashback.

I have a totally sane reason for them to get together and it involves another witch that Dudley was friends with, although he didn't know she was a witch. I can't say more without spoilers.

Yes, I wrote this more than a year ago and I don't think it was betaed. Just checked, and it's unbetaed, and that's one of the reasons it doesn't flow as well. I don't usually need a beta for spelling, but I do need one for flow sometimes and grammar (minorly).

Yes! We actually don't know canonically if Lavender survived or not. I love that in fanfic you can take it either way.

I'm sorry I hadn't updated this in a while. My original plan was to return to it after the re-write of my hidden novel "The Dementor's First Kiss," which was my first completed novella (it will be a novel when the re-write is done. It badly needed a re-write as it was my first fic and not only weird, but profoundly juvenile.). But then I was grabbed by the Staff Challenge with the ghosts that morphed into "Bodies at Rest." So the uptick is that I still want to return to this at some point, but I'm not sure when.

Also, I just noticed that the chapters here are not the current chapters I have on my thumb drive. They are slightly to quite different. For example, my updated chapter describes Dudley's uniform correctly and in this posted chapter I can see it's wrong. I thought I had updated when I corrected some stuff, but I must have decided to wait until I came back to the story.

I'm gratified to hear that my recent stories are better. I credit my betas, reallyginny and Bella_Portia.

If you prefer not to review the rest of this story because it's not been updated in a while, that's quite okay and I understand. I really, really want to tell the story, but I'm so unsure about how to proceed with it stylistically.


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