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Review:AntigoneBlack says:
Hello, I'm back, and I usually only leave a couple of reviews for a story, so I may move on to the next story, and come back to yours.

First off:
Grammar police:
“Moony, where do you think Sirius would go when he’s upset," should be Moony, where do you think Sirius would go if he's upset, or Moony, where does Sirius goes when he's upset. It's a verb tense thing.

I think I am seeing why you are having issues with description, and it's an issue I face myself. You are letting the dialogue control the story, and letting it lead you. It's not a bad thing, but it leaves no room for anything else, like the descriptions. If you are like me, you know exactly what the graveyard looks like, so tell the reader what it looks like. Take a moment to write down what you know the scene looks like, smells like, and the atmosphere and how it makes the characters feel. That will really add to your story, and give the descriptions that your readers are asking for.

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