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Review:Alopex says:
Oh my goodness, I'm still laughing! Galleons are still galleons! Haha, that insufferable man! I seem to remember a Slytherin Quidditch player named Urquhart; I assume this is the same one?

As I've already implied, I found this story to be quite amusing, though had I been in Hermione's place, I likely would have reacted with similar offense. Even though I guessed from the chapter image, I wasn't really expecting a "red lipstick" story about Hermione, but her character really is perfect for a scene such as this one.

Allow me to point out a typo: Found a brought in --> found and brought in. Also, there were a couple places where I thought commas were misused. For instance, when Urquhart asks how he can help her, the comma after "married" should probably be a period.

Blah, blah, boring grammar stuff. I really liked this drabble. In fact, I like the whole collection. I'm quite impressed with it. I have now read everything you have posted on this site as of this moment, and I have to say, this collection is my favorite of everything you've written. It is very good. I'll keep an eye out for future additions to it, as it is a WIP.

Author's Response: Yes, Urquhart did play Quidditch for Slytherin, I wanted to use a canon Slytherin character for this role, but one who was in a different year to Hermione at school.

I'm glad you liked Hermione in this scene, at first I was undecided about which character I was going to use as the 'woman', but I really thought Hermione would be the best to use in the end, because of the way she would react to Urquhart's advances.

Thanks for picking up on the typo, I'll have to fix that. I'll check up on that comma too, I generally always seem to have a few misplaced commas in my writing.

I'm so glad you're enjoying this collection. I was quite proud of these pieces when I wrote them for the challenge at ehpf, which is why I really wanted to post them to the archive. I do believe these reflect some of my better writing to date.

Thanks so much for reviewing, I hope you enjoy any future drabbles I happen to add, as there will definitely be more in the future (there are a few prompts by pookha that I am currently contemplating writing at the moment).


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