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Review:confusedlover says:
very lovely.

i thought that you did an amazing job on this one-shot. i really seemed to capture the whole feel of the story so easily due to your writing and that is one thing that i often find myself searching for. you really forced me to connect with Regulus as a person in this, something that i honestly love to see.

you did a fine job of writing from Regulus' point of view in my eyes. i saw nothing wrong with any of it and am actually very impressed with how everything turned out. you really got inside of his head and when writing with anyone in first person that is something that should be accomplished by the end. the flashbacks were a nice touch and helped me to actually get the idea that he was dying. he was reliving his life in his last moments and that is something that never gets old.

the POV itself was easy to understand as well as the actual words of the story. this was a very readable one-shot so i thank you for that. i did not struggle at all to take in words or to understand a particular sentence and so well done on that as well.

the one thing that i think that you could maybe look out for are the tenses. throughout a few of your sentences i found a few random changes in tense that sort of disrupted things a bit. there were only a few but i just figured that you would like to know about them for future reference. it's something to look out for as you continue to write.

overall, i thought that this was a splendid one-shot that really allowed for a whole lot of emotions on my part. pity, depression, surprise- everything. great job on this story. feel free to, as you already know, stop by and request anytime that you wish. keep up the lovely work and have a great day.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that I could evoke emotions and that it's easy to understand. :)

Tenses? Shoot, haha, normally those are a strong point of mine. Oh well, thanks for pointing that out. :)

Anyways, thank you so much for the wonderful review! :D


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