Hey, sorry it took so long to get to your request!
First of all, let me say that I LOVE the fact that you've done a Scorpius/Lily fiction. There are only so many Scorpius/Rose fics you can read before you want something different. Your story accomplished this. I also liked that it was a fluff story. Different from the normal 'I'm Scorpius Malfoy and I'm pretty much a pimp' storyline. It was a nice change.
I also loved the small background info you included in relation to the Malfoy family, as well as the wizarding world as a whole. The tiny additions of things like the boy Dobby Creevey, and Goran (who wore two mismatched socks and a tea pot on his head), and the fact that the old Malfoy Manor had been donated as an orphanage - they were all perfect and helped to add depth to your story.
Your writing was sweet and simplistic, which went along with the feel of the story perfectly. Characterization was for the most part correct - Scorpius seemed like Draco's son, though without a lot of the inborn prejudices that Draco had. The way he whined for a kiss from Lily felt, to me, perfect - seeing as though he's probably gotten everything he's wanted as soon as he asked for it, most of his life.
Lily had the right amount of mischievousness, in my opinion. The only thing that felt a little weird was her reaction to Scorpius lying about Dom - it seemed like it'd be sort of obvious what he was doing, since she had just asked him to fight with her. But, the concept of Kiss and Make-Up day was incredibly sweet. : )
Great job! It was a joy to read. : D
Author's Response: Hey, thanks a lot for reviewing ^^
Oh, I loved ScoRose ship before it became too cliched, Romeo and Juliet kinda thing, so I started liking ScoLily more and more - now I'm a fan lol xD .
Anyways, Goran is in reality a real person, with his own quirks and odd things, so I just kinda borrowed him from real life o.O, hehe, I dunno how would he react if he knew I used him to make a house-elf ^^ .
Oh, yeah, whining and all was intended to make Scorpius seem like someone who always got what they wanted and all, so I'm glad I managed to capture that :D .
Yeah, I know Lily's reaction seemed weird but she was, in fact, joking and Scorpius was serious (at least it seemed that way to her) - though I could add a line or two like: 'Merlin, she doesn't think I'm joking!' . :D
Anyhow, I'm happy that you liked the story as a whole ^^