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Review:AntigoneBlack says:
Okay, this really has a lot of potential! Nice start, but there are a lot of things that need work to make it great.

The Summer after the 6th
1.Don't just state it, show it. "That was the day he and Hermione had sort of, maybe hooked up, of course nothing was official yet. It was still confusing around them. It was obvious they both had feelings for each other but neither knew how to confess them."

2. Tell the reader who is saying the lines, and the thoughts.
3. Add descriptions! They are your friends.
4. When you're doing the dialogue pay attention to the grammar rules. "said “sorry to…" should be changed to said, "Sorry to…"
5. There are a lot of grammar mistakes. Proof-reading is your friend.
6. You have an issue with just stating instead of creatively writing it. It's an issue that I faced too when I started writing. My suggestion is to read lots of fanfiction, especially the ones that have won Dobby's. The best writing comes from the best readers.

I want to wish you luck!

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