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Review:Clair Clementine says:
This was such a sweet one-shot! Really cool! I was excited to see it was a next generation too! You really did a great job with it! I really liked it!

I've never read something that had been in the first point of view as a guy and I really think you've done a good job with it. I'll admit, I tried desperately to write in first person for a guy, but it's really hard :( But you did a great job! I liked seeing Lily and Scorpius together a lot!

Characterization was really good. I can definitely picture a Scorpius the way you protrayed him and Lily was just as good! You wrote their relantionship out well. I loved the description you used when Score was thinking of Lily. I'm a total sucker for description so this was right up my alley!

The flow was also really good too. I think that the transitions between the events was really good and it didn't last forever and it wasn't too short either. Nice work!

The only thing I have to critique on is that when your characters are speaking, you should probably use quotation marks rather than apostrophes. It's much easier to see when a character is talking as quotation marks stand out a bit better.

But really good job over all! Thank you so much for requesting! I had a good time reading this story! Thanks!

Clair (EvelynCullen09 at forums) :D

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing :)

I dunno, writing from guy's POV isn't hard from me (omg, maybe I'm a guy trapped in a girl's body *oh noes!* lol, hehe xD) - I managed to write this and the one-shot 'bout Theodore Nott ^^ .

Anyways, I'm so happy that you liked it because I honestly can't judge my own fics and you know, having never written fluff before (I'm more of a dark/mystery/adventure kinda person) I didn't know what to think of this :D .

About quotations - I dunno, we use this: ' ' in our English class o.O so... Though in my language we use this: " " . lol, I suppose both is alright hehe ^^ , but I'll keep in mind that it's easier to read it with "" , thanks for pointing that out :D

I'm glad that you liked it :)

~ Kristina


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