|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
My first thought when reading this was how absolutely creepy it was. Then I went back and saw that it is Horror/Dark, which means that the flesh-crawling feeling I got from reading it was intentional. There's something about Andromeda's voice that's so dark and deep - it gives me the same feeling as one of the creepier Hitchcock movies. But as it has to do with Blacks and Malfoys, that feeling fits. They are strange families, filled with darkness and destruction. This would be their existence.
What caught my attention next was the imagery. When reading, I wasn't seeing the words, I was seeing the images that the words created - butterflies and nightmares and stars and goddesses and gelato. But it's not overwhelming at all. It's a lot of imagery for a short piece, but like a poem, it carries it off in its artfulness. This type of story I would call "prosetry" because it combines both forms beautifully - poetry without the line breaks and measured beat.
The way you used Greek mythology perfectly represents the three characters and provides the backstory of their lives and how you've chosen to portray them. Andromeda as a warm loving sister (motherly Demeter); Narcissa as the girl who gets lost in the realms of the dead (the way that she actually doesn't like pomegranates was wonderfully ironic); and Malfoy the Death Eater as Hades. I loved how you could provide those three names and I knew exactly how you were characterizing the Potteverse characters. It's details like that which demonstrate your skill as a writer. ^_^
I love this and can't find anything to critique about it. Once again, Gubby, you've created a work of art. May I steal a wee bit of your talent, just for a little while? :P
Author's Response: I really didn't know how to categorize this when I was putting it up, but the only one that really clicked was "dark", so I guess in that way, yes, the flesh-crawling feeling was intentional. But otherwise, I didn't intend to creep anyone out, but it certainly is... unsettling.
The imagery was what stood out to me most, actually, more so than the tone or, indeed, even the actual subject matter. And I was worried about it having been too much for such a short piece, or if maybe the whole point of the fic would be lost, but I'm so glad that it isn't. I am actually horrible at poetry, so hearing the term "prosetry" is really surprising to me.
Everyone's been commenting on the mythology, and that is probably my favorite motif of the fic. It just sort of slipped in while I was madly writing at eleven thirty at night, and looking back on it, I do think it really fit. I'm so happy you knew what I was talking about by relating the myth personages and the characters, and even more so that it worked.
And Susan, you really don't have to ask for my talent. Yours is so superior that it's not even funny. But still, this review is just amazing and I'm so happy you liked it. Thank you so much!