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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
The descriptions in this are incredibly vivid, so although most of the story was made of long paragraphs, it kept my interest and I didn't get distracted. I could picture exactly how Teddy was moving through the school to the Room of Requirement (that's what it seemed to be). I also liked how you portrayed Teddy. He seemed just right, a solid mixture of his parents and also with his own unique personality.

At first, I thought that the reason behind his amnesia would have something to do with Remus having been a werewolf. While your reasoning was more original, I don't think you quite convinced me. How exactly the ghost connected to Teddy could have been described in a bit more detail, making it more clear exactly why part of Teddy's soul was trapped with the ghost. That part of the story requires more to make it work better for the reader.

But I still enjoyed reading it for the descriptions and Teddy. He's one of my favourite next-gen characters, and it's always great to see him written well. ^_^

Author's Response: Since you are I think (the 19th person) to say the same thing about the second half, I am seriously going to have to read over it and figure out how to make it more convincing.

Thank you so much for enjoying the description and Teddy's characterization. I've always thought Teddy was cute and interesting, but never had the desire to write for him until recently. I did hope I mixed enough of Remus and Tonks together to come up with the perfect combination for Teddy and keep him unique. I had feared he was too much like Harry at certain points.

Thanks again for the review and the concrit and praise.


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