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Review:Elesphyl says:
Ooh. Now if that doesn't promise action, I don't know what does. I'm curious about Vandelia - is she Greek? Her last name does suggest that.

I really liked the dream at the beginning. It showed that Clyde was pretty much just as vulnerable as anyone else, despite his tough, hard exterior. It really gives him a lot of depth, which I definitely appreciate reading about in any sort of character. Here, however, you've pulled it off particularly well.

You were wondering if the plot was still fresh. Well, it's my first time reading this story, so it's definitely fresh for me! Characterizations are spot-on, though I'm a little iffy about the Neville/Luna deal. What House is Clyde in?

Oh, and I absolutely loved this line:

Maybe what I'm destined to be is exactly what I've become already: a bum. A loser. A nobody. I mean, look at me. I'm seventeen years old and I've already gotten myself addicted to drugs, I almost got my girlfriend knocked up, I live by myself, and I've already got gray hair.

It seems so true! A slap in the face for Clyde, so to speak, but self-inflicted. And then when he doesn't want to corrupt Vandelia ... aw!

Great story, great themes - congratulations again on a well-written chapter!

XOXO, Kalina

Author's Response: =D Kalina! Thank you so much! She is Greek, actually, though that doesn't have anything to do with the plot. I just thought it would be an interesting tidbit to include for her character =P

The dream was actually a retake on a dream I actually had. In my dream, I went through the same thing (except instead of Death Eaters it was Nazis. I was reading Night by Elie Wiesel at the time) And when I woke up, the covers were over my head. I thought it would be interesting to include in a story.

Luna/Neville proved to be more difficult than I thought. Luna is by far the hardest character to write, and I'll definitely need more practice writing them.

Thank you so much! I can't tell you how excited I am that you are picking up on all the underlying themes I have going on here. Thank you so much! ^_^


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