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Review:Fuzzy_Slippers says:
Oh, denied! : ( No kiss for them, I suppose.
The backstory you created for why Selwynn has been chasing Mary, and why he killed her parents, was very interesting and shocking. I never would have expected that. Is Mary actually pureblood or is it just something you put into the story, because it isn't mentioned anywhere for certain?
You do have a way with leaving the reader hanging, and wanting more. Remus disappearing was a very nice touch; it'll help Mary deal with her own weaknesses as well as add (even more) mystery and drama to the plot.

I noticed three things while reading. 'I hadn't even though of something like this happening' Missed the 't' in thought. '. . . and he was not going to allow her to spend time with those unworthy of her time.' I'd suggest leaving out the last 'time', just to avoid being repetitive; it works just as well without it. And lastly, during the flashback, 'This was there fault.' Wrong form of there. : )

Good chapter, once again! Off to the next one.

Author's Response: Ah, the kiss shall come. It was cruel of me, but it just so happened that it had to occur the way it did. Pity really, I love Mary and Remus together :D

I never wanted her blood to be a whole "she's a pureblood and she's not evil, thus she's just like Sirius and blah blah blah" so it was never a huge thing to be mentioned. I felt in this chapter it was necessary to mention that she was in fact, a pureblood witch who was at one time, friends with other purebloods who believed in all that pureblood elitism.

Mary has a lot to deal with in terms of her own character flaws. I cannot stand for character (canon or OCs) to suddenly lose all sense of character development. When I started this fic, it was 100% a character exploration and was based on how much a character could evolve and change based on the situations I've placed them in. And it still is. No matter how much I love my plot, it's all about Mary growing and learning and becoming a better person - a better witch.

One day, I'll have no typos in a chapter. One day, maybe...in the near millennium. Lol. Thanks for pointing them out (since I'm terrible at seeing them).


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