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Review:DeaVanity says:
Hello, reviewing as requested. I'm sorry it took me a while but I was on a trip and couldn't read it all...

I'm not usually a major fan of horror/dark stories but you write well and this was...interesting. In some parts, though, it was a bit, well, not boring, but slow.

And I'm not sure if this whole thing would have that kind of an effect on people but if it did then you did a great job in writing the whole thing.

I did notice one small error, in the first chapter you referred to Clyde as Clyde Rogerson, but later on you changed his surname (it's not a big deal but I thought I'd let you know...).

Anyways, concerning this chapter - Clyde is in Gryffindor, right? Shouldn't he be brave or something? I mean, okay, he was contained in a train cart for God knows how long but still... Though I do like your characterisation of him. I can't relate or feel sorry for him but he's an interesting character. ;D .

On to the final chapter *dies to see what happens in the end* xD

~ DeaVanity

Author's Response: Thank you! It's no problem about the wait - I didn't even notice =)

I totally understand your point about it moving slow. But the horror here is really about what is happening to them psychologically. There wasn't a lot of room here for action scenes, you know?

Oh, geez. That dumb mistake. Thanks for pointing out his name. I'll fix it. =)

I understand your concern about Clyde being brave, but just because he is in Gryffindor doesn't mean he has to be the hero, you know? Clyde as a person only cares about getting his cigarettes. Not the fate of his friends.

Thank you so much! I know I might have come off as a bit harsh but I really do appreciate your review =)


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