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Review:ohcrapidroppedmybrain says:
"The site's official rule on incorporating diary entries and letters into your stories is that only 1/3rd of any given chapter may be a diary entry or a letter while the other 2/3rds is narrative."

That is a ToS rule that I found while reading their tutorials. I don't want you to get in trouble or anything =]]

And your banner is rocking. Tell xdaanana (she did the banner right? It says xdaanana's banner/title challenge) that she did a great job on it=]].

Anyways, onto my review!

Wow, this was very dark and angsty! It took all of my will not to cry on the spot! What I liked most was Regulus's character and how he exactly became "R.A.B" (I call him "Rab" in my mind. Just a fun fact =]]).

Okay, so the letter with Sirius...genius! It really shows how much he cares about Sirius still even though Sirius made it quite clear he wants nothing to do with his family. I also like the fact that you gave Sirius and Regulus a Lily/Petunia type of relationship. The description of the poor little first year cornered by death eaters was very sad...and almost realistic (I think Dumbledore would of found out somehow what they were up to and put a stop to it).

ANYWAY, that night, she did what I didnít have the courage to do. She saved the little first year, despite the fact that the five of us towered over her, couldíve completely broken her by barely lifting a finger. She stood up us, five Death Eaters in training.

I think that the "anyway" makes everything more rushed and less dark. He gets out of character. I suggest taking it out, but you don't have to take my advice. Sometimes, I really don't know what I'm talking about.

Going on, going on...

When I realized that the Death Eaters had jumped the poor Hufflepuff girl, I was like "No! How could they!" But as it is, it was nice of Regulus to try and heal her. The poor boy needed some courage! The girl really showed true characteristics of being a Hufflepuff (and no, I don't mean good finders like Cedric off of a Very Potter Musical. I mean loyal and caring). The way you wrote her was magnificent. I believe she is a truly unique character that can never be re-written like that again. And that description of her way lovely! Very Jo-ish.

My mouth was hanging open from the moment that girl died to the end. I couldn't believe you killed her off (nah, jk. I did. How else would Regulus become R.A.B?) It was well-written and possibly one of the best one-shots I have ever read.

Good job!

Author's Response: Hmm, hopefully it'll be alright, because I'm not a TA, so everything's been validated by a mod. ;) And I checked, one of my longtime fave authors, KimMalfoy, has a fic up as well that's 100% letter, so it seems to be fine :) Thanks for the concern, though.

Actually... I'm not too sure what's happening with the challenge. Haven't seen that thread in a while though, but if I find it I'll pass the msg along; it is a really pretty banner isn't it?

I'm glad you liked the transition to RAB, I guess I kind of wanted to explain the motivation behind it, y'know? I hadn't thought of it as a Lily/Petunia type of relationship before, but now that you bring it up, it's true.

I'm glad you liked the characterization! (And wow - the Jo-ish comment's such high praise). Thank you so much for the great review and the superkind words!


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