Hello! I'm VampireKisses from the forums :). But you can call me Kristen - it's way easier. How are you tonight?
I have like five stories I still have to review (I know! Bad! But life gets in the way sometimes) but I just HAD to stop by and review this. I love this story so much!
The title in itself is just so powerful, and it sticks in your mind for a while. In fact, that's how I found your story - not by your banner (which is quite lovely by the way) but by the title of this piece. It was just like BAM! You could tell it was going to be awesome stuff just by looking at it. How did you come up with it?
Your sense of voice for each girl was also brilliant. I think your sentence structure factored into it alot because there was just something about the way you strung your words together that made me think "woah. Powerful stuff." I think my favorite voice has to be Bellatrix because she was so different than Cissa and Dromeda. Who was your favorite to write? Did you have fun with writing Bella?
In a way I thought you incorporated symbolism in a great way. I'm sorry if I am confusing you here, I just mean that like for instance, you have the sane Andromeda and Narcissa speak in the first person. Then there's Bellatrix. The way you tackled her was amazing, I loved how you had her written in the third present tense. It may just be the English nerd in me jumping for joy but I thought the style in which Bella was written was to present like an "out of mind" sort of technique, like she no longer has her sense of self (I) or reason (all the crazy bits :P.) I loved how the blood also kept coming up throughout the story. It seemed to suggest that Bella and Lucius and whomever the blood came in contact with dirtied their souls and like blood is their form of bondage in family duty. Were those the things that what you had in mind writing this? Or do you think I'm just crazy? xD
Your sense of canon was wonderful! I LOVED how you tied in everything so that it helped create a deeper meaning of the Black sisters. Narcissa being friends with Regulus was very original. The way you've had their relationships with people was simply spellbinding! I really liked how you dug into the dynamics of Rodolphus and Bellatrix. Their relationship is severely depreciated in canon and I'm glad you filled them out. Furthermore, one thing that stood out to me was when reading Andromeda's chapter, she talks about her relationships with her sisters, and she says how Bellatrix feels too much, and that that would be her biggest downfall. In a way it is an open fact, but I don't think many HP readers realize that about Bellatrix. Lord know, I didn't. That part right there opened my eyes to her all the more.
Let's see, concrit? There were a few itsy bitsy things I'd like to address:
In the first chapter Andromeda claims that Bella and Cissa are her younger sisters. In actuality, Bella's the oldest I think - she was born in 1951 and Narcissa in 1955. Andromeda's birthdate is blotted out :).
And also...I DID NOT WANT THIS TO END! I was so shocked to see this was completed months ago. If you wanted to, you could turn this into a novel.
I told you they were itsy bitsy bits :P.
Keep up the fantastic work! This story deserves all the Dobby nominations.
P.S I voted this as Best Canon. Congratulations!!
P.P.S I'm sorry if this was a really confusing review, and if I rambled and didn't give you alot to go off of, but this was just made of awesome.
Author's Response: No fear, I recognise you! Lol, Kristen will be easier, and I would just like to start this response with the biggest thank you you could possibly imagine. I just got back from holiday, so I was unable to respond earlier, but this review was as unexpected as it was welcome and I can't thank you enough for taking the time to leave it. I hope I manage to leave a response that gives you all the information you want to know ^_^. Also, just so you know, you're making me blush profusely XD.
I adore the banner. It was my first experience with the magical land of UFG at tda and I fell in love with it instantly. As for the name, it was the first thing that came to me. When I joined HPFF it was never with the intention of writing anything other than the occasional review that I wanted to keep track of, but soon I felt that I didn't want to be just another empty author page, so I became more open to the idea of writing fan fic. After that it gradually swam into place, first the name, closely followed by a vague idea for a one-shot and then, very gradually, the short story that is there today. I think the power that the title holds was partially what inspired me to go on; I suppose I have it to thank for the fan fics I have today!
Again, thank you very much, your compliments are extremely flattering. I enjoyed writing each sister in their own right and I really loved trying to pad them out a bit and make them more three dimensional. Originally this was destined to be a one-shot about Andromeda because we know so little about her, and I adored the free reign I had with her. I also enjoyed writing Narcissa because it gave me the opportunity to challenge her 'evil' nature and to project the idea that things aren't always as they seem. Finally, I couldn't not enjoy writing about Bellatrix. Her chapter took an extremely long time to come because I spent so long trying to write her in first person and found it impossible. When I wrote it like that I either had to sacrifice some of her insanity, the essence of Bellatrix, or have it literally going in circles and not being of much interest to read, that's when I decided that writing in a different style wasn't necessarily a bad thing for Bella. She was SO much fun to write and I loved trying to recreate her unstable nature on the page.
Do you know you may just be the first person to hit the nail on the head and discover what I was really trying to convey with Bellatrix's chapter. Chapter three can be looked at in two ways (in my opinion) as an impartial third person, or as Bellatrix sort of narrating the tale herself, but not truly seeing it as her or the person she has become. I considered it to be the latter, even if I know I didn't explain it very well there XD.
Most of the response was cut off, so I'll PM the rest over XD