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Review:Nait says:
Your writing is very precise and accurate in it's descriptions and the slow-paced, calm plot unfolds quite well.
It will be interesting to see how Dumbledore's life runs along (with all the familie issues) and how it turns around with Grindelwald's appearence.

Yet, I believe that you, by now, have already realized one of the main flaws of following JKR's indication that Dumbledore is drawn to his own gender.
The story simply cannot take place in Hogwarts.
This entirely removes the ability to give the reader a different perspective on Hogwarts through Dumbledore, which I found to be one of the most interesting aspects in "The Life and Lies of Albus Dumbledore".
He has no interest to partake in the Quidditch folly, nor does he wish to engage himself in meaningless social gatherings for those who lack the ability to absorb, comprehend and utilize knowledge.

As it is, while I'm definitely most curious how the story will continue to unfold and that your abilities as author will provide an entertaining ride, I very much miss "The Life and Lies of Albus Dumbledore", with Hogwarts Dumble and his relationship with Helena. (Which I consider, while un-canon [if you take everything JKR states as canon] to be far more enjoyable and intriguing - partially, of course, due to the fact that a A/G relationship is very, very difficult to write, since as soon as one becomes too descriptive or too close to an actual A/G relationship, one would lose Dumbledores character)

Of course, all the above can be summarized in a: "Great job, nothing less to be expected, but I miss the old Dumbledore story and would prefer to read that one."
But I like writing long reviews, and I really like using brackets to put in some additional personal thoughts.
Ah, on that note, the final one:
(Somehow I am also under the impression that you found it much easier to write "TLaLoAD" [abbreviated to save space, which is entirely negated by this additional passage] - and maybe, just maybe even a bit more enjoyable.) ;)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks for all your feedback! I know that we'll lose a lot of Al's character development by not seeing his days at school, but I'm still optimistic that I can compress the heart and spirit of Life & Lies into this shorter version. Dumbledore is basically the same age in both stories so hopefully his adolescent angst still comes across.

I do miss Helena as a character but considering that (in my mind) her romantic prospects with Albus were as ill-fated as his with Grindelwald, I don't think the story will hurt all that much from her absence. The slash level won't be all that intense - it doesn't need to be to tell the story that needs to be told.

Again, thank you so much for your comments and criticism! I genuinely appreciate it. =D

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