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Review:siriuslyhockey says:
Well written story. You're very good at describing the setting in this story and I can clearly picture the environment Teddy is in.

There isn't really much to work on in terms of grammar.

One suggestion I do have is on your dialogue tag where it says, Teddy spat angrily at the ghostly visage. That response seemed a little out of character. Maybe just, he said angrily, is better. He spat just seemed a little out of nowhere for Teddy's personality.

So basically that is the only suggestion I have lol b/c the rest of the story is good and dosen't need any work.

Well done and good luck on future stories!

*Kristina

Author's Response: Kristina,

Thank you for taking the time to read this. It was my first attempt at Next Gen.


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