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Review:Alopex says:
What a very unique story. In your request, you mentioned that there wasn't much dialogue, which is true. I actually found that my favorite part of this story was the beginning, while Teddy was wandering about, thinking, looking, existing. That was all description, no dialogue. I thought the description was excellent. I thought you conveyed the mood of the castle and setting very well. I could feel this heavy stillness, almost a melancholy feeling, that was peaceful and yet slightly unsettling in a way. The scene seemed very alive to me. You did use many, many adjectives. Any more would have been too many. As it was, I really loved the description throughout the chapter.

I thought the story seemed a little rushed toward the end. The flow was altered. I don't know if that was on purpose because of the sense of urgency of getting outside before daylight, or if it was you simply rushing toward the end of the story to get it over with. I personally wish the last part had kept that almost dreamy feel, the slower pace.

Seth's situation reminded me a bit of the movie "Brigadoon." Are you familiar with it? Basically it is about a town that appears for one day every hundred years. Something similar seems to be happening with that room. I liked the way you described Teddy finding the room and trying to imagine it. However, I thought he was perhaps a bit too quick to accept that Seth was a part of him (I'll admit I'm a little confused on the details there) who'd been cursed into haunting a room. I would have liked some more background information to help me understand the circumstances better. The interaction with Seth was my least favorite part of the chapter, actually.

I liked the ending again, though, when it was just Teddy again. I thought the final paragraph had a similar "feel" or mood to the beginning. There was a certain dreaminess, as if everything that happens in the earliest hours of morning is only half-real. Reading the final sentence, I could almost imagine that Teddy had dreamed the whole thing, though he hadn't. I'm really intrigued with the description and mood of this piece, and the feelings it invoked in me as I read.

Author's Response: The last sentence was by far my favourite line of the fic. It just seemed to me that it fit so well with what I was writing. I love my Teddy, and this fic. I am sorry it's confusing, the part with Seth. I might one day add in more info on him, or write another fic, perhaps longer, with Seth in it.

Thank you so much for the lovely review, I do so much enjoy hearing what people think. Good or bad.

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