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Review:SiriuslylvnSirius25 says:
SiriuslylvnSirius25's review:

An all-around good story if you ask me, but I do have a few things to point out. One: in the beginning you mentioned Ravenclaw house, which I had assumed was where Teddy would be residing, but at the end you said he went back to his dorm in Gryffindor. You might want to check up on that, but it's really not a big issue.

The second thing I must mention, which is really more pressing is the whole doppelganger ghost thing is a bit confusing. Truthfully, it just feels like a last minute idea that popped into your mind without really thinking it through. I don't get how a part of his soul would be locked in a room for some hundred odd years when he's 15 at that moment. Nor do I understand the reason behind it. I know you wrote that he was cursed there by a woman, but I really don't get how that could be. Sorry, it's really just all very confusing to me. I suggest going through that section and re-reading it to see if everything you meant to be in there is written. Maybe you meant for it to be that way as a sort of 'let the reader decide' thing.

Anyway, your writing itself is very good. I love your descriptions of the room and Teddy's feelings. You're grammar is also very well. Only a few run on sentences, but they were quite minor.

I loved how you wrote Teddy as a 'night' person. Somebody who loves the moon and the stars. It's a good contrast from how his father was, and I think more often than not kids are very different from their parents. I liked that I lot. I also liked how Teddy only knew about his parents heroics through books, really. It seems very realistic that Andromeda would shy away from the topic of her daughter and Remus.

Again, I'll say it was a lovely story. Other than the confusion with the ghost and the house he belonged to, it was great! 9/10 =]]

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. Everything I wanted to be in the fic is in the fic. I did leave it open to allow the reader to fill in blanks however they saw fit. It was never a last minute addition, because, honestly, I don't write like that. Sure I get these strange ideas in the middle of writing a longer fic, but never with one-shots.

As for Teddy's house, it says in the beginning that he left the Gryffindor Common Room and continued on his way, being pulled in the direction of the Ravenclaw common room. It was something that I felt needed to be put in that section as it was describing that part of the castle.

I'm not sure the all kids are different from their parents. As I can almost 100% say my brother is almost a duplicate of my father, with a few of his own traits. But I do agree, a lot of child are complete opposites of their parents. I simply saw Teddy as the type of person to enjoy the night - perhaps, because I do too.

Thank you again for the review, and I do appreciate the comments you've made about what confuses you.


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