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Review:timeturner says:
Interesting, interesting take on Regulus' sorting. I'm a sucker for a good chapter about the Black boys and this one fits the bill.

Regarding your primary concerns on the chapter: it flowed easily, no problems at all. I'm horrible at grammar so I won't attempt any critique there :P. Description was great at the beginning and end but seemed a little weak during the transition to the sorting scene. There was nothing wrong with it, it just seemed that you rather rushed it to get to something you deemed more important to the story. And I had no problem "forcing" myself to read it as I enjoyed it thoroughly.

Now, to the things you didn't ask about. I find your characterization of Regulus intriguing. The idea that he would be fearful of his sorting is obvious when you write it this way but not something I have previously considered. The way you have him struggling and trying to balance his loyalty to his family against his loyalty to Sirius was wonderful. His struggle with the sorting hat was particularly well written, considering that we know how Regulus' fate ends up.

Excellent job and thanks for allowing me to read it.

Author's Response: yay :D i'm happy that it fit the bill. i know a lot of people love the black boys so i wanted to do reg justice.

thank you! i can see what you mean by the transition. it didn't need much description, i thought, because i was focusing mainly on his emotions. however, i do tend to rush things from time to time, so i'll try to work on that.

fantastic to hear. :3 like i said, i wanted to do regulus justice. i wanted to show that even though he has it all, he still struggles in life because of all the expectations from his family and sirius. thus, i'm glad that you have said that, because it sort of.. affirms that i did it haha.

thank you for the comments! even though i'm horrible at responding to reviews, rest assured that i really do appreciate the time you've taken to read and review.

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