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Review:Jane_Volturi says:
Wow, that last bit was so unbeleivably sweet, i feel so sorry for poor Andromeda. Anyway, here's my thoughts on this chapter.
To be honest i'd never have touched and Andromeda fanfiction before but surprisingly your chapter title just had me intrigued and i simply had to read this. wasn't dissapointed either.
Firstly your charactreization was brilliant, there was an equal balance of personalities mixed in there. I could really step into Andromeda's shoes you know, relly place myself into her position. I think you did a brilliant job writing her, i could really grasp her emotions and delve deep down into her thoughts. She was very easy to relate to and i couldn't help but pity her because she was in mourning of her husband and her daughter. Teddy was really cute, he seemed so carefree and innocent, just how a five year old child usually is, i like the way you kept his personality and dialogue young, usually people tend to forget to do that. Then there was Bill, as kind and caring as ever, he was very in character. I loved your characterization overall, really well done.
Your plot wove so professionally in to JK's own story, it was the perfect epilogue for Andromeda and i personally do not think i could have done a better job myself. I liked the way your writing flowed easily, your composition was good and just the basy storyline overall.
Grammar was a little bit funny near the middle, you had a habit of jumbling up your word classes every now and again, that's easily edited though.
Spelling and Punctuation were both perfect, atleast i didn't stumble across any hiccups or mistakes, everything seemed good.
Descriptive language was good, though considering your writing style is exceptionally promising you could really improve with a little practice, not that it isn't good already, i just think you have a really good talent for writing, that's all.
Overall this was a really good story, i enjoyed reading it so that's a definite 10/10!
Katie

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