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Review:Aisu Hoshino says:
This was a really beautiful story. It was very well-written and heartbreaking.

My only criticism on the writing is the use of italics. Italics make sense for quick flashbacks, but when the flashback is the dominant part of the story (as it is here), it can be rather unnecessary/distracting. Other than that, the writing was very great.

I think you did well with the time period. The only big criticism I have here is that you didn't tell how Rowena handled her pregnancy - although pregnancy out of wedlock has always happened, it has not always been accepted. Considering that you have Rowena as royalty, chances are she would have had to get married promptly for a cover-up. Really, you've made a good set-up for a longer Founders piece here.

Other than that I think you handled it wonderfully. I could easily see the speech and mannerisms fitting the time period, and I really did love this story. I love the era and the emotion of this, and you did do a great job.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing for me!

Since this is the second time someone has disliked the italics, I'm going to go change them. :]

I loved your feedback and found it extremely helpful, I'll probably edit the story and include something about how she feels about being pregnant: which was actually that she was scared but happy.

I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Thanks again!

--Emily

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