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Review:alanapotter says:
YES I ENJOYED THIS! Heh. I make my point clear enough, yeah?

I just absolutely adore your stories! Ahhh! Everything is just awesome and flowing and eventful. And even if it's not there's all this emotional description that makes it seem like there is, gah! Where can I get your skills? Please share :]

I love how these characters are so similar... it makes their arguments and the aftermath of them so much easier to play with and you delve right in, using exquisite adjectives to interest the audience and convey the proper emotions to a tee. Simply amazing.

I really like how you gave her another escape... an opportunity, if you will... to rely more upon herself than the dependence she has on Rab. The piano playing and her memory of it were so easy to relate to. I play music, so I can definitely put myself right there, but I'm sure anyone who doesn't can understand what it means to her.

"And all her life she had known but only one place to find such a thing" -- the use of 'but only' together is kind of confusing to me... I re-read this like four times. Just figured I'd let you know :P

I love the whole house elf scene too! It's like they've started to listen more to Alanna than Rab, but at the same time they can't. It's really interesting and the way you portrayed the relationship between Rab and the elves was pleasing. Gimpy. Bahaha that name makes me laugh. Maybe I'm just tired...

Really though, another spectacular chapter! I'm so glad you updated it :] And while I didn't read the other idea you had for this, I think this is wonderful! There's so many places you can take it.

Until the next update :D
-Jill

Author's Response: Haha, oh, Jill. I'm sure you have skills, too. I want to check out the stories of all the authors who follow mine, but it's so hard to find time. I promise I'll get to it someday.

I felt like Alanna needed something uplifting in her life, and considering her mental condition and overall instability, I felt like music would be a good anchor. I also play music, so I'm glad this was relatable to another musician. :)

I love house elves! :D That's why I incorporated them as more than just servants. Alanna is not a Hermione-type who feels bad for them; quite the opposite, she's repulsed by their subserviance and pathetic devotion. That's important because it unconsciously spurs her to change her own actions.

And Gimpy IS funny. One of my volleyball teammates hurt her ankle a few years ago and the whole team christened her "Gimpy." :P

I'm glad you liked this - I never put up the other idea, I just battled with it for a few days before deciding I still liked this better. Thanks for another great review!

~Gabby


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