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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
Hi!! Sorry its been forever since you requested it, but here is your shiny new review:

All in all, I thought this was a well-rounded little story. I thought that the story (like the song) swung back and forth like a pendulum. It was quite appropriate for the mood and style of the story.

I usually do not like angsty Lily stories, but this was wonderfully done. It seems like their fight was so silly and inconsequential, but to two young teens in love, the smallest of fights feel like world war three.

I loved your characterization of James. :) He's always tops in my book. Lily, I feel could use a little work. The stream of consciencness style, while suitable for the mood of the story, seems to make her character a tad disorderly and repetitive.

Besides that, I think this is a lovely story. I'm glad to have read it. :)
-witness

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'll take on board what you said about Lily, I think I need to do a little tweaks here and there to her character.
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