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Review:celticbard says:
Hi Drue!
It's celticbard from TGS, here to review as requested. ^_^

First off, I love the originality of this piece. It's not every day one comes across an OC with a legitimate disability. Furthermore, you handle Lia quite perfectly. It's obvious that she wishes she could speak but she also seems ok with herself. Her confidence rings true, as does her complete understanding of James as a person...which brings me to my second point. ;) I thought the romance was wonderfully written. Really, you did an excellent job. James obviously loves Lia, but he is realistic about their relationship. And even though he adores her, he doesn't have her on a pedestal, which is quite refreshing to read.

Other than that, you seemed to have some problems with tense in this piece. The first half-the back story-is told in the past tense. Then, you switch to the present tense during the wedding scene, but jump back to the past tense after a few paragraphs. I think this story would work well using the past tense for the flash back and the present tense for the wedding. However, the past tense throughout works just as well. ;)

I really liked this piece, Drue. It was so nice to read something uplifting and sweet for a change. As always, feel free to drop by my queue and request another review. I hope you have a great week! Take care!

Best,
celticbard

Author's Response: Ack thanks so much, dear!

Yes, I did struggle with the tenses. I would be writing and then think "oh wait, is that right?" Now I know that I should definitely go over it.

Thanks so much again! I'm really glad you enjoyed it and I hope you will give the novel your opinion too when it comes out! xD

-Drue


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