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Review:rachm34 says:
Aww, What a really cute oneshot bout them. I agree with you, not many people have ventured out to write Hannah/Neville stories so you writing one makes people very drawn to yours seeing how unique it is.

I loved the softness of your opening, how you took a couple paragraphs to just slow done and describe the scene. It was perfect the way your described it. Your descriptions were very soft, light, and soothing there. They described the surroundings to me very well.

I think it's really sad for Neville to be loosing his mum. I love how you put it into perspective.

Hannah's characterization is really well written. In Rowling's work, honestly we don't see much with her so the author of a story about her is able to bend, change, and write the character however they please.

There was one mistake I caught. You used the word "Waste." as in, I think it was: "Hannah wrapped her arms around Neville's waste."

You used the wrong spelling of waste. There are two different types of waste or waist. There is the type of waste, as in trash, as you used. Or the Waist as in the body part. You need to change yours to the WAIST. Not the waste. And other than that it was golden. The grammar was good, the writing was clear, and you really forced the reader to think.

:)

Author's Response: Aww. Thank you for your kind words. :)

I love writing description, so writing about the setting and Neville\\\'s body language was the best and easiet part for me. I could write on about that sort of thing forever.

I am glad you found it sad. I usually end up writing extreme-angst or extreme-fluff. I wanted to capture Neville\\\'s feelings at losing a mother he really never knew. I\\\'m very glad that you feel I succeeded.

As far as Hannah goes, I cannot picture her anyother way besides a sweet, loyal, and dutifully caring woman. As far as I am concerned, that is the perfect woman for Neville.

Thank you for pointing that mistake out! Although I\\\'d just like you to know that it is quite possible that Hannah wrapped her arms around Neville\\\'s rubbish. I\\\'m glad you caught onto this. I definately didnot want the reader to picture Hannah with her arms around a waste can. ;)

All in all, thank you for your kind and honest review.
-witness


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