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Review:Whimsical Diva says:
First off, I'm so terribly sorry for having taken so long to get round to reviewing this. Was doing exams, didn't have time for anything else, and didn't want to leave a half-arsed review.

It's been sometime since I last read this story, and reading this chapter today, I remembered how much I'd enjoyed this; the intricacies of the plot and the OC's (who, incidentally, are few of the most well-rounded OC's I've ever seen in fanfiction). When I read stories - fanfiction especially - if I particularly like a story, I find myself thinking as to whether I could have done it? Whether I could have conceived or written the very same story. Quite often, the answer is yes; i.e. I could have written something like that. And with that feeling, every last bit of awe I feel for the story vanishes. I mean, I still like it, but I'm not in awe anymore.

With this story, however, when I ask myself the question: Could I have written anything like this?, the answer is a resounding no. No, I couldn't have EVER written anything even halfway this good. Goodness knows creating a couple of OC's has been hard enough, and here you have, what 17! OC's, with the list, I take it, only going to get longer? What's more, plot, OC's etc notwithstanding, this story continues to be so damn entertaining. If this were a published work, then it's be a real pageturner.

As often as not, fanfics - especially those set in the nextgen era - fail to pique my interest because there is no plausible conflict. But here, you've managed to establish wonderful conflict. I'm equally intrigued by both The Chancery/Synod and The Watch. I don't know which school of thought, which idealology I subscribe to because everything is so hazy at the moment, but I like it that way. It keeps me totaly wired up, and I can't wait to read the next chapter to find out more.

My only suggestion would be to strengthen the characters' voice a bit more. I have absolutely no trouble with the voices of the Chancellors, but I do feel that the Watch members' voices could be a little more distinctive. But that is only my personal opinion. :)

Meh, this review is just all over the place, but there's nothing much to say without getting embarrassingly fangirly. I want to read more. Please, PLEASE update soon.

- Renee

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