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Review:alanapotter says:
Very nice! I love how the whole beginning of this chapter was just her contemplating various topics... it really helped give the audience an all-around sense of who she is, how she deals with things, a bit of an introduction to her relationship with Quirrell. I like the whole shutters thing... it's really cute :]

The whole scene with the goat's head was interesting. I feel like the end of it could've been a bit more emotional, though. When she was getting frustrated with the boys it was clear that she'd had enough and they'd better hand it over, but I feel like she should've had a bit more of a reaction to the thing calling her names than she did. I don't know, maybe that's just how you wanted her to react.

I loved the scene with Lupin too, especially how you showed it from his perspective. It was wonderful to see her from the eyes of another character, even if only for a moment. The way you've characterized him is wonderful, and his reaction to her movements was amusing.

I really don't have any concrit besides the whole emotion thing mentioned above! We're getting a thunderstorm at the moment, so I'll have to come back later to do more!
-Jill

Author's Response: Hi Jill!
Wow, thanks a million for the detailed review! Your feedback was awesome, as always. ^_^ I really cannot properly express me appreciation to you. It means so much to me to hear from fellow writers and fans of HP.

I am glad to hear that you enjoyed the Lupin bit. He is definitely my favorite HP character and I was worried that I would turn him into a Gary-Stu. He is just so lovable! It is hard not to like the guy. ;)

And thanks for the tip about the goat\\\'s head scene! Concrit is the best gift a writer can receive. I will certainly use your comments when I go back and revise.

Again, thank you for everything, Jill! I hope the thunderstorm did not knock your power out. ;) Have a great weekend! Take care!

Best,
celticbard

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