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Review:Groundswell says:
I think it's so very sweet.

Instead of writing a whole story, you've summoned the whole relationship up in a few scenes, which pretty much tells it all. No need to read all those small things in between. I really like that.

And it's our typical Hermione and Ron too. Stuborn and both have a hard time talking to each other about what happened, which of course is the reason they didn't get together right at once.

The lyrics, I think, is very sweet. I haven't ever heard the song, but I do think they're fitting. And they've been put in in the right places - making small partings in between the scenes.

I especially like your start. You show how it's takena toll on him - and her - and how they act differently with it.

I think the flash-back-italics part was well done! Spot on and not too emotional. Some tend to overdo these situations, but you hit the correct dose of it.

And the same with the proposal. Ron wouldn't pour all of his heart out, and he didn't. He thinks she's wonderful and he's glad out their times, but that's it. Great Ron with the emotional range of a teaspoon - though a little more sensitive ;)

And Hermione... Always try to be strong, but sometimes fail, and when she does, it's not possible to miss out on it. Just like what we've seen in the books - your characters are believeable.

Though I do love this, I can't help but stop and wonder what exactly was your focus on this story? I mean, the proposal, and the birth... Most stories need something which is the centre, but I think you missed out on this. If you'd let the story continue till they died, I could have seen it as a thing going all the way through their life, but I don't. I miss some kind of focus - Does that make any sense?

But besides that, I think it was a very sweet story and it's a delight to read something where they don't fight and have all kinds of trouble. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you! I\\\'m glad you thought so.

You know, I was getting fairly sick of reading stories where Ron and Hermione (whether or not they\\\'re the main characters) were always fighting. I mean, we all know it happens, so the amount of times I\\\'ve see it in fics has kind of annoyed me. Therefore I chose to ignore all that :] But yeah, I had to make sure that they were both still in character, therefore the ignoring and avoiding :]

Ohhh I love this song, it\\\'s by one of my favourite bands. I\\\'d definitely suggest listening to it ;] And the credit for work on the lyrics goes to HogwartsGirl618, who beta\\\'d this. I had two stanzas lumped together at only two or three different intervals; the way she put them in works MUCH better.

Ron is definitely one of the easiest characters for me to write. I\\\'m not exactly sure why, but every time I sit down to work on something with him in it, the words just free-flow from my fingers. On the other hand, Hermione is one of the most difficult for me, so I\\\'m really glad that she came over well.

I guess there wasn\\\'t a particular focus... just Ron\\\'s perspective on a few different days in his life... how things come full circle in his complete love for Hermione. It ends when Rose is born because that\\\'s when his heart is split between the two of them; there\\\'s still room to love his wife, but it\\\'s not as much as before because he also has so much love for his daughter. I hope that makes sense... haha.

Thank you so much for the kind words! I really appreciate them! :D


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