‘He saw Morgaine chew her lip and frowned.’ I remember as a child, she did that ALL THE TIME!
I liked that line, took us back to her childhood at Hogwarts.
So, Severus is a ghost until he completes his ‘unfinished business’? Does that mean all the Hogwarts ghosts have some sort of unfinished business also?
I also loved this…
‘I have missed you.’
It was impossible to decide who had spoken the words first, but once they had been said everything seemed easier somehow, as if a big weight had been lifted from both of them. And for a tiny moment, Severus thought that he had seen a smile in Morgaine’s eyes.
That was so beautiful. Your story is SO beautifully written and so true to Severus’ character. I’ve never read a story that looks so deeply into Severus’ feelings and was so true to who he is. After reading your chapters I always feel like other people and I who have written of Severus are making a mockery of him in some way. So thank you for making such an amazing story about the real Severus and for not sugarcoating like most people.
I feel so sorry for Morgaine, knowing that all along Severus cared for Lily. But I like what he said…
‘-Many times I wished I were brave enough to put an end to everything. But then you came into my life, Morgaine, and you gave me something Lily never did. You gave me acceptance, and you gave me your love. And while protecting Lily’s son was my reason to go on living, your love gave me a reason to survive.’
That was SO amazingly written, you’re truly a great writer, Morgaine. And this one nearly made me cry!
‘I will stay by your side as long as you want me to, Morgaine. It is the only place I want to be.’
That was so beautiful. I’m just sitting here copying all your amazing quotes, I might as well just copy your entire story and put it in this review box and just say “GENIUS.” Because it’s ALL so amazing!!
Author's Response: Naw, dear one, what can I reply except: THANK YOU!!
Really, I read your reviews and think: Hey, maybe this is worth while after all.
I don't think all ghosts at Hogwarts have unfinished business. Some of them chose not to pass on, others might not know why they are still there.
I try not to write Severus too much out of character, but it's hard. No one really knows him, right? We only get to know him through Harry's eyes in canon, and Harry doesn't like him. JKR gave us a lot of space to play.
Still haven't gotten back to your story. I'm very sorry. I am taking a Harry Potter summer course at university and am currently writing a 10 page essay about Severus Snape. That, and having 2 stories going doesn't leave much time/peace for reading.
Talking of writing: I have added a last chapter to Morgaine's Story, I 'bridge' if you like. Have a look, you might like it.