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Review:long_live_luna_bellatrix says:
Hi there! I'm here for your review. I must say, what you described of this when you requested had me wary- but this was amazing.

The key part, the one that made it not your average Sirius/OC, un-real love part was the end, the part where they didn't get together. The fact that Sirius was smart and left her, also with some new wisdom, was perfect. That made it fantastic.

So in answer to your question, it did work, beautifully. Your OC was great, because there were actual reasons for her going to bars every night, and she had actual feelings and wants that can be hard to describe. Sirius was also written well, and not playboy by any means.

Don't change anything. I'm not a fan of mostly romantic stories, but since the ending changed everything, it was perfect. This is not cliche or anything like that, by any means. Way to go!

~lllb

Author's Response: Haha, sorry to scare you. It was only a fair warning.

Glad to hear that it worked well. A large part of both Sirius and Tori's characterization is maturity - the 10 years and difference of experience is HUGE. Tori does also have an obsessive condition, but even if the reader doesn't realize that, the point is the same. I'm so happy to hear that you liked Sirius, because I think he's very difficult to write.

Thanks for reviewing, and I'm glad you liked it!


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