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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
hm. I got you PM on the forums and figured I'd take a look at this story. I usually have a problem reading things that are non-cannon and such -- so when I started reading this, I was concerned. However, I though it flowed together quite nicely. I think the first person and present tense worked out well. The first couple paragraphs were a little rough sounding, but after thinking about why, I decided that it was because I wasn't yet in the narrator's head. After I felt more at ease being in the narrator's head, I decided that I liked the person/tense combination. It provided a very "in-your-face" view. I think that overall, it worked out to be a successful story.

I tend to write first person on occassion, but always in the past tense. I give you a lot of credit for trying this out. It is a scary under-taking. :)

Author's Response: I just replied to the PM. It was so nice of you to stop by.

I do personally feel that the person and tense combo sounds awkward, so writing this was pretty painful for me. I wanted to challenge myself, though. Plus, I tend to LIKE writing challenging characters. All my OCs somehow turn out mental, like Tori in this fic. Maybe it says something about me? =]

Haha, thanks so much for reviewing. I hope to work with you again on another collaboration sometime! [Once our current one is finished, of course.]


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