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Review:confusedlover says:
very lovely.

this was an amazing attempt and a new POV and style of writing. i am very, very impressed with what you have done with this story. when you mentioned that your main character was indeed a little insane i was sort of confused. of course i know what insane means and all but i was curious as to how you were going to incorporate insanity into such a story. i really liked what you did with this. with a new take, new characters, and a new style of writing, it is sometimes difficult to get things right but you did a lovely job of making this as accurate and realistic as possible. it made perfect sense in the most frustrating and confusing way. you really built up the insanity, but i think that it might not be so noticeable for other readers. you told me exactly what was going on, but if you did not tell me, i am not so sure that i would have got it exactly right. i would have been able to notice that something was mentally wrong with your character but i am not sure whether i would have nailed the severity of her case. just something that i thought that i would point out. anyways, nice job on this. i really liked this one-shot and was honestly impressed with everything that you provided. good luck with your writing.

Author's Response: Bahaha, don't worry - I use the term "insane" very loosely. I didn't mean insane like post-Azkaban Bellatrix insane. Tori's point of view is just distorted because she's lost for what to do with her life AND obsessive about being needed by men at the same time. Her self-esteem is very low, obviously. So that's why I warned you that she may come off a bit insane, that's all. =]

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it. I wasn't sure how it would come off to readers so I asked your opinion. Thanks for this review!


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