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Review:Dellacqua says:
Yesss, another amazing chapter! You really do get the characterisation spot on and are brilliant at including the child-like behaviour of them as well.

I especially like how you wrote Dumbledore, he's somebody who I always think people either get very, very right, or massively, massively wrong. You got him exactly spot on, exactly as I would expect him to act and speak.

One of my favourite parts was the conversation between Sirius and the Sorting Hat, in particular: "“Well, you are certainly a surprise,” mused a voice suddenly in his ear. Bollocks, thought Sirius, going rigid in surprise." That bit was comedy genius and really made me laugh.

I loves James' unending pursuing of Sirius, never finding offense in his anger and always maintaining this strong belief that Sirius is meant to be in Gryffindor and most importantly meant to be good. This is obviously something which we know of James later, with his obsession with Lily and never letting her rejection push him away or upset him.

I really think this is fantastic, I also loved the introduction (to who I can only assume is Remus) as having "a look of hopefulness about him." Bless his heart, that is exactly right.

Anyway enough of my mad ravings. Me reviewing this, by the way, doesn't mean I disregarded In My Time of Dying, it's just that when i looked at the two I saw this was meant to be a prequel so thought I might as well try this first. It might be the case that I hop to a couple of other people in my review queue before I get to In My Time of Dying, as long as you don't mind, purely because those after you are a 2 chapter and 1 chapter story so I might as well get them done now before I get stuck into yours.

Nonetheless, dark or not, I'll definitely be reading your other fanfic because you have a fantastic writing style and are so brilliant to read, I can't wait! Easily 10/10.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you keep mentioning the child-like behaviour. I actually worry about that! Seriously, I do, because I actually had a review saying they seemed a little too grown up. Which is fine, and everyone has their opinions - I think they're both really intelligent, so I thought I could get away with them being somewhat mature. They both have somewhat elegant upbringings as well. Oh look at me, trying to convince you, sorry!

Dumbledore is such a challenge to write. I've written him a few times now, here and in my war fic also. He's tough, but it feels really good when you're done and you're pretty sure it turned out okay. I'm glad you liked him, because I'm always proud of Dumbledore's parts :)

James was tough to write, for while I've put a lot of thought into Sirius's childhood, I haven't put much into James. I know he's immature and a bit of a bully, but I also know he's loyal and intelligent. I truly do think he saw something in Sirius that he wasn't willing to let go, and I'm glad you find that to be in character for him. I think he's patient and caring and forgiving underneath that arrogant exterior.

I'm pretty sure that is, in fact, Remus. I haven't read the chapter over in a couple of months, but that sounds like him.

I'm thrilled that you've decided to read both stories. This one will, in fact, be a prequel someday. It began as just a spur of the moment thing because I knew I couldn't get away with never writing them in Hogwarts. I'm excited for it, but my priority is the other one right now. Take all the time in the world, I am ecstatic beyond explanation that you are giving my stories a shot at all - most people take one look and run, not wanting to read anything long.


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